Everything wrong with “Was it rape if you liked it?” (Yesh it’s rape.)

Every thing wrong with “Was It Rape If You Liked It?” by TiedUpHeart
Fiction, Bondage and restriction, Cruelty, Domination/submission, Drug, Male/Teen Female, Oral Sex, Rape, Reluctance, Romance, Spanking, Teen, Virginity, Written by women, Young

Introduction:
Lise, a sophomore girl, got involved with Alex, who’d already graduated high school. Lise broke up with Alex. But who knows what can happen at a party?
1: Partying?
Chapter I – Lise
“Lise! Lisa! Elisabeth!!” Alex called after me as I passed. I continued to walk at a brisk pace, putting distance between myself and my ex-boyfriend.
2: Wtf, don’t be a dick.
3: He calls her Lise, than Lisa.
“Please Lise… I just wanna talk… ” He sounded weary, so I slowed, reluctantly. He caught up and walked beside me. He brushed against my arm, sending tingles up to my spine. We walked in silence for some time, side by side. I could feel his deep green eyes on my face, but I didn’t dare look into them, for fear I might fall under their spell and take him back.
4: So it was just his eyes? That’s shallow.
No, for now, I walked with my eyes trained on the sidewalk in front of me.
Alex sighed and stepped in front of me, forcing me to stop. A car whooshed past, headlights illuminating his handsome face.
5: Why didn’t he do that when he caught up with her.
6 That car will have to be doing a 180 Facing them at the 90 degree to do that.
My heart jumped when I saw him, then he was enveloped in darkness again, just a black outline against the yellow glow of the streetlamp.
“Lise… Can we talk?” He asked taking one small step towards me, beginning to close that small space between us.
“No, Alexander, we can’t,” I attempted to step around him, but found myself in the vise of his arm. He pulled me close, and I could smell him, sweet and musky all around me.
7: Musk doesn’t smell all that good.
I felt weak, and in no way able to resist him. His scent fogged my mind, and rendered me numb.
8: Is he a wizard?
“Aw Lise, don’t be like that…”
9: Be lke what?
He murmured, deep and soft, against my hair.
“That’s not fair.” I mumbled into his chest. I could feel the beating of his heart, slow and steady and strong. Unlike mine, which was fluttering at a hundred beats per minute. His chuckle was almost a purr.
10: Is he a cat?
He pulled me out of his embrace and held me at arms length by the shoulders. I tried my best to look strong and independent, but his presence was breaking down all the barriers I’d thrown up between us.
11: what barriers?
“What’s not fair is how you’ve been avoiding me. Lise, I don’t even know what I did wrong.”
“I just needed… A break.” I toTruth was, I coldn’t remember why I’d broken up with him in the first place.
12: *couldn’t.
Hell, I couldn’t remember my own name while looking into those bright bright eyes.
“Lise…”
13: Is he a dealer?
Is that who I am? I thought incoherently. I was slipping away. Was he at the party?
14: Why is it “Was he at the party?”? I thought she was at the party.
I thought, drowsy. Was he the one who brought me my drink? That was my last unspoken, unanswered question before the black swarmed my vision, and I passed out in his arms.

Chapter II – Alex
I’d loved Lise for a long time. She was easy to love – Everyone loved her. It was hard not to… She was outgoing, smart, funny, a great friend… She wasn’t high maintenance either, with her face unmarked by makeup and her hair short and messy.
So watching her pass out cold was hard for me. It hurt me to see consciousness fade from that ethereal face. But it had to be done.
14: So he’s winter! No? THEN WHAT THE FUCK IS HE!?
I pressed her small, limp figure to me once more, reassured by the fact that she’d wake up soon, before throwing her over my shoulder and carrying her away.
15: That is not a chapter.
Chapter III – Lise
The only thing I felt for a while was warmth.